Homework

These charity singles for global crisis’s are very kind and highly thoughtful, aren’t they? Also, it’s very organised; many renowned artist come together to perform this song. Doesn’t it show that these artist really care about the people whom are suffering from the killer disease? Most of the Earth’s population listens to music and watch the T.V, so essentially this is the best way to spread their messages.

In actual fact, maybe these so called “selfless ” artist aren’t so selfless at all. Maybe these artist are doing this to gain more recognition globally. What if they are only doing to get more people to listen to their music so they get more money. They could be putting on a front for us, deceiving us. What if they don’t really care but do it because it looks bad for them.


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  1. jnorth Avatar
    jnorth

    Hello Moniem,

    Your attempt to use counter-arguments is clear, but I wonder: did you plan this before writing?

    Targets:
    1) Have a look at both paragraphs – where could you be more concise?
    2) ‘They could be putting on a front for us, deceiving us.’ – This is where your vocabulary and expression work best – how might you consistently work towards this level?

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