Easter Holiday Homework ; Write

King Duncan has being murdered! He has been stabbed in his sleep, in his own room. Within the Castle walls there is a traitor,there is a conclusion that there is a murderer in the mist, a killer amongst us because our King has no enemies within the lands of Scotland, and however it seems that we were wrong, but its too late to change that. In addition that King Duncan’s murder was not of international problem, but of a national problem.

The murderer, is suspected , to some how close to Duncan, somehow someone that King Duncan trusts. Moreover, from the King’s corpse we can tell that his killer was in a way nervous, due to the stab wounds, the stabs were not very swift. Furthermore, the traitor has been nervous about this event so they have been worried about this event, and this was no accident, it was no natural incident, this was a staged event.

The hidden murderer, the one living amongst us has to have been disturbed recently, not exactly mentally aware of what was going on around themselves, plus someone whom can wield a dagger or sword quite swiftly, but was not able to maintain their nerves and let it get the better of them.

It claim it to be Macbeth! Yes, Macbeth the killer of King Duncan. Macbeth the one who fits the criteria to the bone. He has been disturbed recently hasn’t he, he left the dining hall when King Duncan was there. He is very skilled with a weapon of that kind, but even he was nervous and he has left his mark of loyalty on dagger which killed our King Duncan. Although he is, what I believe, responsible for King’s death, there is another person lurking in the shadows, I think it is his wife Lady Macbeth.

I have a strong feeling that Lady Macbeth was the encouragement behind this sinister plot, I have a reason to suspect that Macbeth would not do this of his own will, but if either forced or made by witchcraft.


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2 responses to “Easter Holiday Homework ; Write”

  1. Miss Drewett Avatar
    Miss Drewett

    A very dramatic speech! I can see that you have considered how this would be delivered to an audience; hooking them into the story immediately. I particularly like that you have written the speech from the point of view of someone within the play’s action and detailed the murder for us (it’s like Shakespearean CSI); it is original and engaging.
    This point of view however, does make it tricky to develop your last two paragraphs as (in character) you cannot know too much about the character’s real involvement. I think to develop this you need to put that aside and imagine you have heard rumours or whispers about the Macbeths’ involvement in Duncan’s murder. This way you could perhaps involve some quotations (in an ‘overheard’ them saying way) that would develop your belief that it was Lady Macbeth who is most to blame.

    Also: make sure to reread your work closely to ensure that sentences are phrased clearly e.g. consider separating some of your points into two or three sentences so that the ideas stand out clearly rather than being lost in one longer sentence.

  2. jnorth Avatar
    jnorth

    Hello,

    I really have to agree with Miss Drewett – this is an excellent effort that shows a real sense of understanding and purpose. I think this is some of your best work. I particularly like you development of voice and tone that carefully persuades your reader.

    Targets:
    1) Try to include no more than two clauses per sentence
    2) Focus on spelling – edit this for clarity.

    See me and we can go through your first paragraph in detail.

React!